Sebagaimana yang saya janjikan sejak sekian lama, berikut ialah paparan latihan menulis dalam bahasa Inggeris yang saya dapati dari kelas di Abbasiah. Seperti biasa, petikan A adalah yang belum diperbaiki dan petikan B adalah yang telah siap dibaiki.
A
If I were...
If I were a big leader, I would get myself close to Ulamak and scholars. I would listen to them before others. I would try hardly to follow The Prophet Muhammad steps as he led the ummah to Allah and successful life. I believe in Islam as a way of life. It always brought us to happiness and peace, no matter we live in numerous races or we live as community. Islam is a system of life. It was a perfect gift from The Creator. And I would never get myself dare to insult any part of the gift. So my friends, whether we like or not, we are a leader; a leader to ourselves, a leader to our coming family, to our community and so on. So the important for the leaders is a system. The best system you have, the best you will lead them.
B
If I were...
If I were a leader, I would try to bring myself closes to Ulamaks and scholars. I would listen to them before I listen to others. I would try hard to follow the ways of The Prophet Muhammad as he led the ummah to Allah and a successful life. I believe in Islam as a way of life. It always brings us to happiness and peace, even if we live in a multi-racial society or as a community. Islam is a system of life. It is a perfect gift from The Creator. And I would never dare to insult any part of the gift. So my friends, whether we like it or not, we are each a leader; a leader to ourselves, a leader to our coming family, to our community and so on. So the importance for the leaders is a system. The better the system you have, the better you will be able lead them.
Teacher Syazlin: GOOD SUBSTANCE, JUST NEEDS MORE WORK ON CORRECT VOCABULARY AND TENSES.
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